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Across vast fields and oceans blue
Lies the land of what's myth and true
Where thy dreams lived and future foretold
And where thou canst find the memories of old
Where time fails to keep record of every breath
The land everlasting, unaffected by death
A lullaby I wrote
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mizubender Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Short but definitely a lovely read. :)
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Paul774 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
it's the first thing ever that i fave from the literature category.... i love it for it's shortness, very nice poem^^

I Aear cān ven na mar.
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh, thank you. I am honored.
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Paul774 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012
allow me one question, as i'm not a native english speaker... i thought ART is 2nd person singular such as in "thou art" but you used it for the land (=third person)...i thought it should be "is the land..." and so i'm clueless now.... or did you you write art as if speaking to the land itself???

another question, were you inspired by Tolkien??
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had never quite looked at the usage of the word so much but now that I do, I suppose you are correct. Thank you... I will correct that.

And as sad as it may seem, I had not read any of his work until someone else commented earlier on this poem with his name too. :) Now that I've read some of his stuff though, I really like his work and see the similarity.
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Paul774 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
np, i'm glad i could help ^^

it's cool that you didn't even know him and yet can write stuff which is similar and reminds of his work in many lines
especially the last line is very tolkienish, referring to the undying lands of valinor^^

being from your imagination only makes it even better now^^

please write some more of those short poems (i love them cause i don't need to look for too many words i don't know)
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know. It is quite a coincidence. :)

Thank you so much. It means so much to me that you enjoyed my work. I am very appreciative. :)
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Candace-in-Candyland Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like it! Thank you.
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myworldinwords Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks I really appreciate it.
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